Isen Mulang Cultural Festival
Isen Mulang Cultural Festival is an event held to
recognize the cultural and ethnic diversity in Central Kalimantan. Isen
Mulang means “Never give up” or “Never
retreat” in the Dayak Ngaju language. It is the motto of the
province of Central Kalimantan, which was formed on May 23th 1957. It is become
part of people's lives in Central Kalimantan from the past until now. Isen
Mulang Cultural Festival is regularly held on May to celebrate the birthday of
Central Kalimantan and that included in the annual agenda of the Tourism
Office. Palangkaraya ever become the overall champion in the cultural
festival events. In Isen Mulang Cultural Festival there are a variety of
events. Starting from a lively opening in big square, downtown Palangkaraya. At
the opening there was a parade followed by thousands of people from a
variety of districts in Central Kalimantan. There is also a contest of traditional
food, dance competitions, traditional games and also a selection of sons /
daughters tourism. Cultural Festival Isen Mulang has strong local support, but
seems to be little known outside of Central Kalimantan. Even though, it is not only showcases Dayak
culture, but also cultural tribes of migrants from Central Java, East Java and
Bali. They participated in a parade and show cultural diversity. In conclusion,
Isen Mulang Cultural Festival is annual
agenda that unique to showcase the diversity in Central Kalimantan.
Isen Mulang Cultural Festival : “Festival Budaya Isen Mulang” in Indonesian language
Diversity : Variaty
Never retreat : Never moving backward Tourism Office : “Duta Pariwisata” in Indonesian language
Parade : Walk
somewhere in a formal group of people, to celebrate or protest about
Annual agenda :
An event that held in each the year
Showcase : To
performance
1. - the paragraph is good . the topic sentence, supporting sentence,and the concluding was good.
BalasHapus- the paragraph is good enough. but your topic sentence not yet covering.
- in 7th line,I suggest you to remove the sentence (Palangkaraya ever become the overall champion in the cultural festival events).
2. - the supporting sentence is covering the topic sentece.
- the supporting sentence was clearly, but I think you should focus with the topic was talking about in your paragraph, it is too general. for example you just describe about the event's history and another general information but you dont explain with dearly about the features. you should explain again about the contestnof traditional (food, dance competition. traditional games and also the selection of girl tourism ambasador). I think the point of your paragraph is talkig about the features in so you should explain and focus about your topic.
3. the concluding sentence was summarizing the main sentence.
4. the Paragraph yet unity and coherence because there is still a mistake in supporting his sentence. you must fix a supporting sentence related to the topic sentence many more followed with a minor.
1. i think your paragraph is good and your topic sentence is enough. your supporting sentence and concluding sentence is clear.
BalasHapus2. your supporting sentence is good and has support topic sentence.
3. your concluding sentence is good too. and i think it is enough to conclude your topic and supporting sentence.
4.your paragraph is unity but you can add signal word in your paragraph such as "for example " and "then example : Starting from a lively opening in big square, downtown Palangkaraya. then At the opening there was a parade followed by thousands of people from a variety of districts in Central Kalimantan. for exampleThere is also a contest of traditional food, dance competitions, traditional games and also a selection of sons / daughters tourism. Cultural Festival Isen Mulang has strong local support, but seems to be little known outside of Central Kalimantan. Even though, it is not only showcases Dayak culture, but also cultural tribes of migrants from Central Java, East Java and Bali. They participated in a parade and show cultural diversity.
1. I think your topic sentence that is to specific. Please write it be better again. Example : “Isen Mulang is a Cultural Festival event in Central Kalimantan” and then after that you can write “This event held to recognize the cultural and ethnic diversity in Central Kalimantan”.
BalasHapus2. The supporting sentences that is enough to completed your paragraph but please pay attention the arrangement of sentence. Because the disarrangement that will be make your paragraph so difficult to understand. .
3. I think your conclusion that was conclude what was your write in the paragraph.
4. There is a sentence I think not coherence in the paragraph that is ”Palangkaraya ever become the overall champion in the cultural festival events. In Isen Mulang Cultural Festival there are a variety of events”, but if you want keep write it you should more explain about the competition, because it is about the competition in this event. Is it right ?